Ditch the Endless Cycle of Revisions & Discover Exactly What’s Not Working in Your Story and Why
Say goodbye to endless revisions, wasted time on aimless edits, and the constant uncertainty of whatâs actually holding your story back…
…and hello to clear, actionable feedback from a professional editor so you know exactly what to fix in your next round of revisions with confidence.Â
You’ve revised your story more times than you care to count, but despite all of that time spent, you’re still not happy with your story…
Simply put, your story still isn’t ready to publish.
It was just a lot of wasted time and a heck of a lot of frustration and confusion.
Why didn’t your revisions work?
Truth is…there’s a lot of things that could go wrong during revisions.
But after spending endless hours breaking down and analyzing stories for Fantasy and Romance authors, I’ve narrowed it down to 3 main issues:
- ďYou're editing without clarity on what the real problem is (in other words, treating the symptom instead of the underlying problem).
- ďYou're making line-level edits when a deeper structural issue is what actually needs attention.
- ďYou're afraid to make bold changes, so you keep tweaking small ones (which means you stay stuck in the same draft, just dressed up differently).
And by missing the mark on those 3 crucial components, you stay stuck in the revision cycleâwasting time, losing confidence, and still wondering if your story is any closer to working.
Just Because Your Revision Didn’t Give You the Results You Hoped For…
Doesn’t Mean Your Story is Broken or that You Should Give Up on It Entirely.
You want to finally feel confident that your story worksâwithout rewriting the same scenes over and over, chasing vague feedback, or spending months editing in circles.
But youâre not a story structure expert, a developmental editor, or a professional book coachâso it makes sense that you need guidance to actually move your story forward.
You want proven editorial tools and expert feedback that will help you pinpoint whatâs working, whatâs not, and what to revise next, so your story finally clicks into place.
I hear youâand Iâve been exactly where you are right now.
Thatâs why I created the Story Breakthrough:
A fast, focused way to get clear, actionable feedback from a professional editor, so you can stop second-guessing your draft and start making edits that actually work.
So if you want to…
- ďFinally understand what's working and not working in your story because you have personalized video feedback that breaks it down clearly.
- ďMake strategic, high-impact edits with confidence because you have clear feedback from an editor.
- ďKnow exactly where to focus during your next revision because the analysis reveals exactly where your structure could be improved.
But don’t want to…
- ďKeep revising blindly with no idea if your changes are helpingâleading to wasted time and endless frustration.
- ďGet overwhelmed by vague or conflicting feedback that leads to confusion and stalled progress.
- ďInvest in a full developmental edit too soon that leads to spending more money without knowing if the draft is ready.
I’ve got you covered with the…
Story Breakthrough
This fast, focused editorial review gives you the clarity and direction you need to finally fix whatâs not working in your story and help you move forward with confidence.
Here’s what’s waiting for you inside the Story Breakthrough:
- ďFirst scene evaluation to help you see whether your opening is hooking readers or losing them on page one.
- ďOutline and Blurb Review to spot plot holes, weak structure, or unclear stakes so you know where the bigger issues really lie.
- ďPersonalized Video Feedback to walk you through what's working, what's not working, and exactly what to fix in your next round of edits.
- ď BONUS: Learn how to sum up your story in one irresistible sentenceâso you can stop feeling tongue-tied and start hearing, âI want to read that!â
But Talk is Cheap…
Hear what other authors have to say about this feedback…
I was struggling with knowing if my story was interesting enoughâor if it was too much or too littleâand whether it hit the right points at the right time. Getting the correct genre conventions while still telling my own story has always been a challenge for me.
The Story Breakthrough helped me solve these problems! What I appreciated most was the summary that clearly identified and explained the issues, with specific support in the outline. This will help me get my story out, ensure my stakes are high enough, and make sure all my characters get what they deserve.
I wanted to get a second opinion on the structure of my novel before its release and get a sense if my outline properly conveyed all the crucial story elements.
The Story Breakthrough definitely helped me with that!
What impressed me most was how EXTREMELY thorough Jennifer was in going through her notes, and the video summary of her writeup was invaluable. It was so well done!
As a pantser, I was aware that the structure of my book didn’t fit any of the standard patterns, which was concerning me.
The Story Breakthrough definitely helped solve this problem! It gave me valuable ideas about developing the flaws of my main character so they would sabotage his dreamsâexactly what my story needed.
What I appreciated most was the explanation of the 5-point structure, complete with links to more information about it. Learning that the resolution had to come in one hit rather than gradually was an eye-opening insight.
Hey There!
Nice to meet you đ
I’m Jennifer
Your story coach and editor who helps you figure out exactly whatâs workingâand whatâs notâwithout wasting months revising the wrong things.
Most writers think they just need another round of revisions, a better writing routine, or more feedback from critique partners.
But more than just more revision time, what matters most is:
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An honest first scene evaluation to see if youâre pulling readers inâor losing them at the start.
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A clear understanding of your structure and stakes to fix deep story problems, not just polish sentences.
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Personalized feedback that connects the dots so you know what to revise and why.
Without these pieces in place, youâll keep editing without moving closer to a story youâre proud ofâor ready to publish.
You focus on telling the story only you can write…
Iâll give you the direction to make every revision count.
Ready to revise with clarity and confidence knowing exactly what’s working, what’s not, and what to fix next?
Get expert feedback on key scenes, summary, and outlineâplus a personalized video to guide your next revision.
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Have questions about the Story Breakthrough or whether it’s a good fit for you?
Click the chat bubble in the bottom left hand corner to be connected to me (Jennifer) immediately.
Or send me an email: jennifer@fictionrefinery.com.
